Both this and the preceding poem are masterpieces of brevity, something I have always had trouble with(hence my love for the 55)I couldn't admire them more, and especially your restraint in not trying to make them bigger. My life too seems full of rusty shadows, and I have felt that singing raven perch on my eyelids too many times.
Thank you for reading, Joy. I sometimes get a one-liner stuck in my head, and then I draw a blank, so I am turning them into something with my art. I am glad you have enjoyed these two. I hope to do a few more in time to come.
Ah, you are experimenting with minimalism! Sometimes that requires the kind of focus that can only be good for us poets to nurture, even when we expand to longer pieces. Well done, old friend.
Oh, sweet coincidence that we both chose to share American sentences today! Mine are quite prosey, I feel, with (I hope) a touch of the aphoristic. This one is a beautiful poem albeit brief, and while I think it needed no artwork to 'turn it into something' but was already Something, still the artwork is a nice addition.
I choose to turn my poetry in to art, Rosemary. The two go hand in hand when I imagine these pieces. I enjoyed your take on the American Sentence today too.
I love the imagery in this short, sweet couplet, Kerry. The combination of Spring and rusty shadows made me think of an old bedstead with rusty springs, where Spring and Spring sit and sing the ‘old songs grown cold’. Your illustration is gorgeous.
The image and words really compliment one another, I love the old phonograph with trumpet flower as the sound horn. There is so much change in this write expressed so beautifully.
"old songs grown cold" stored in old memories. I like the drawing of the old phonograph and the image of the horn as if it is a flower. Well done, Kerry.
Your artistic talent always amazes me. I love the image and the poetic music you wrote for it. In every new season the notes of an old song sing us through.
Both this and the preceding poem are masterpieces of brevity, something I have always had trouble with(hence my love for the 55)I couldn't admire them more, and especially your restraint in not trying to make them bigger. My life too seems full of rusty shadows, and I have felt that singing raven perch on my eyelids too many times.
ReplyDeleteThank you for reading, Joy. I sometimes get a one-liner stuck in my head, and then I draw a blank, so I am turning them into something with my art. I am glad you have enjoyed these two. I hope to do a few more in time to come.
DeleteThe "rusty shadows of old songs"....how wonderfully put!
ReplyDeleteI worked on the order of words a bit until I liked it. I'm glad you do too.
DeleteAh, you are experimenting with minimalism! Sometimes that requires the kind of focus that can only be good for us poets to nurture, even when we expand to longer pieces. Well done, old friend.
ReplyDeleteI wrote 31 Illustrated American Sentences in Oct 2019. So I like to keep practising now and then.
DeleteThank you!
ReplyDeleteOh, sweet coincidence that we both chose to share American sentences today! Mine are quite prosey, I feel, with (I hope) a touch of the aphoristic. This one is a beautiful poem albeit brief, and while I think it needed no artwork to 'turn it into something' but was already Something, still the artwork is a nice addition.
ReplyDeleteI choose to turn my poetry in to art, Rosemary. The two go hand in hand when I imagine these pieces.
DeleteI enjoyed your take on the American Sentence today too.
I love the imagery in this short, sweet couplet, Kerry. The combination of Spring and rusty shadows made me think of an old bedstead with rusty springs, where Spring and Spring sit and sing the ‘old songs grown cold’. Your illustration is gorgeous.
ReplyDeleteHow lovely, Kim. What a great association to make.
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So much in so few words - wonderfully composed
ReplyDeleteMany thanks, Jae.
DeleteA beautiful from me too.
ReplyDeleteAn excellent American Sentence.
Anna :o]
Thanks, Anna. I do enjoy the form, and try to get at least one image into the 17 syllables.
DeleteThe picture is amazing and the poem is so heart wrenching.
ReplyDeleteAww.. thanks, Vandana.
DeleteSuccinctly beautiful. Salute.
ReplyDeleteI often catch myself singing them silently; they get old but they will never grow cold.
So true.. the old songs are the best songs.
DeleteSuch power even in the brevity of your words, Kerry!💝 I can feel the shadows of old songs growing cold.
ReplyDeleteI'm glad that idea comes through. Thanks, Sanaa.
DeleteTruly beautiful Kerry- both the American sentence and your illustration!
ReplyDeleteThe image and words really compliment one another, I love the old phonograph with trumpet flower as the sound horn. There is so much change in this write expressed so beautifully.
ReplyDeleteThank you so much for your insights in to this sentence and illustration. Glad you enjoyed the piece.
DeletePerfect poetic packed sentence that takes us somewhere.
ReplyDeleteBittersweet!
ReplyDeleteI love that from now on, I will probably always think of flowers and the seasons when I look at a gramophone.
ReplyDelete"old songs grown cold" stored in old memories. I like the drawing of the old phonograph and the image of the horn as if it is a flower. Well done, Kerry.
ReplyDeleteYou have mastered the short form, so much contained in so few words. Happy flowers and warm weather!
ReplyDeleteOh, the drawing and the lines in this. Such a perfect quiet afternoon mood.
ReplyDeleteGreat art and poem!
ReplyDeleteMuch❤🌷❤love
It all comes back, but some of those rusty songs are still a source of great joy...
ReplyDeleteLovely combination - your words, your illustration. You're so talented!
ReplyDeleteI love the brevity of this. I am always afraid to go this short--but you make it look easy
ReplyDeleteWell said!
ReplyDeleteYour artistic talent always amazes me. I love the image and the poetic music you wrote for it. In every new season the notes of an old song sing us through.
ReplyDeleteBoth the illustration and the well chosen words are such a delight.
ReplyDeletePerfect AS
ReplyDeleteThat illustration of the flower/gramophone is just sooooo creative! And rusty shadows..wow!
ReplyDeleteMany thanks for all the wonderful comments on this one-liner! I do appreciate the feedback.
ReplyDeleteWow this is a delicate bite of brilliance Kerry! The image goes with it well!
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